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Sandman

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"Sprinkling  delicacies in your irises, 
Floating gently to sit besides you, and tell a tale or two."
I hold the hands of the sleepless trying to give them
the nudge to the early morn.
Numerous sense my presence as I pull them from the 
dark images below the eyelids,to turn off that movie projector.
This task takes floating from individual to individual. 

I.
I travel on to a hospital down the road and,
all dreams of death will pour out of their pores, a cancer stank.
I collect the offensive odor and prepare them for the next days givings.

II.
To the no nonsense lawyers and doctors with dreams of surgery.
I send them success in things other then employment; something to cling on.

III. 
The little girls teddy bear has fallen off her pillow and I wish to cuddle her;
this untainted perfect vessel without societies fingerprint marks.
But I must move on to the next moonlight windowsill.

IV. 
I am moving down the road when I see a wobbly finger, a lost soul.
She is ready to sleep and forget the nights without a roof over her head.
Landing in a wobbly bend, I apply my magic touch and float off.

V. My last visitor is a man I have been watching for many nights, not giving in to sleep.
I crouch and watch him up writing poem after poem, verse after verse cut out.
He turns suddenly and winks at me, a bow required from me. 
Even as I settle down when dawn breaks, the image of the man is stuck in my mind.
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prettyflour's avatar
Hey there,

Prettyflour here on behalf of :iconpoeticalcondition: with the critique you requested.

I think the imagery is strong here- especially that first stanza- really sucked me into the story.
Your concept is interesting and the formating suited the words really well. You me entertained from start to finish with a really well written poem that filled with with images being...kind of chased by death, but it was hopeful too.

A well written poem, an impactful one. I don’t have any constructive feedback to offer on this. I like it just the way it is.

Thank you for sharing. :heart: